Two poems to contrast light and dark

It is only on the brightest days
When the sun glints blindingly
Off the glass enshrouded skyscrapers
And the digital billboards
Scream in brilliance about some
New product that will make
Your life even more luminous
Than it already is
That you can see how
Dark the alley really is


Dim twilight descends on a
Smog encrusted town.
Beggars compete with rats
To see who is the most filthy
The sounds of wheezing
And consumption
Fill the filthy air
And all eyes are drawn
To the diamond on the
Rich man’s finger


At dVerse, Björn has introduced us to the 17th century artistic movement of “Carrovagionism”. This movement emphasizes light by the use of shadow. I have tried in the first to use light to emphasize dark, and in the second poem I tried to do the reverse. NOTE: consumption is an older term for tuberculosis.

NaBloPoMo Day 24


15 thoughts on “Two poems to contrast light and dark

  1. You really went for it, Bryan, with these two poems. I like the way the darkness and light mirror each other: starting the first with the ‘brightest day /When the sun glints blindingly’ – we had one of those this morning – and taking us into the city and its dark alley; and then starting the second in the dim twilinght of the ‘smog encrusted town’ with those rats and beggars, wheezing and consumption – sounds like Dickens’ London – and ending with the diamond on the rich man’s finger. A dazzling ending!

  2. Bryan both of these poems meet the challenge, but both stand alone as great poems. The modern and the industrial age….but that second also applies today. I’ve seen this in the alleys of Atlanta…and TB is back full time now. Consumption seems such a quaint term, but TB is entrenched in our prisons and jails and this time it is a strain that has mutated and is antibiotic resistant. Jesus! But great contrasting poems.

  3. It was lovely and to me they were the same city in different times, so in my mind, the first verse was about Manchester now in this period of time, and the second was in the darker days of the industrial revolution, with the cholera, or even in the post war period with your reference to TB. We were (my parents/granparents) of poorer stock and lived amongst the dirt and filth and sewerrats. So I liked the contrast and what lurks behind the brightness. Many thanks. Much love.

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