Struggle to survive is the highest aim
in the wild. Whether woods, meadow, or pond
this fight for life is a constant. The same
desire resides in all creatures. Beyond
the basic drive to seek out food and drink,
shelter and companionship is the need
to be alive. I doubt that fish can think
of what’s beyond life, but they would all plead,
if they could, to hang on to it. To thrive
and continue, unending ’til time’s end.
Too many, though, of one fish would deprive
the rest. This problem, only death can mend.
It may seem strange, but there’s a place for strife
Some are destroyed that others can have life.
I’ll be guest-hosting the bar today at dVerse (doors open at 3pm EST – that’s 1pm where I live!). I do hope that if you haven’t already visited this wonderful on-line poet’s pub that you will! Today we are talking about the how form affects meaning, or why we have chosen to write in the form that we have…what we hope to accomplish. The following is a brief explanation of the “why” of the structure of my poem.
In my Water sonnet cycle, I have been trying to stick fairly close to the Shakespearean sonnet rhyme structure, although I have consciously attempted to not over-use iambs. In fact, if you were to scan my poems in this series, you would likely find that metrical feet don’t really work. Each line has 10 syllables, but not necessarily 5 metrical feet. If reading this out loud, you should not pause at line ends, but rather at thought ends. Other than the last 2 lines, the rhymes should appear visually, but should not be overly noticeable to listeners. My goal in doing this was to retain a certain structure, but to have a conversational tone. I like the Shakespearean sonnet form for the opportunity to build up a story or an argument, and then have a bit of a “punch-line” at the end of the piece.
*please note: by saying that there is a place for strife, I’m talking about strife in nature in specific, and metaphorically, I’m referring to bad things do happen, but in the grand scheme of things, may be for the best. I am in no way endorsing or condoning violence.
The complete cycle can be found by hovering over the The Elements – Sonnet Cycles tab up above, and then clicking on Water.